Hello there,
Here is my poem, I hope you'll enjoy it !
(Don't forget to comment).
Let me dream
Let me dream of...
A world where children wouldn't know,
What war and fear are.
Then, they'd live peacefully without sorrow.
It's such a lovely thought...
I don't wanna wake, so let me dream again...
Let me dream of...
A society where selfishness and individualism
Wouldn't have their place anymore,
And all would be sharing and full of altruism
Could it be possible ?
I don't wanna live in this dull reality, just let me dream again...
Let me dream of
People who wouldn't be scared
To express and imagine whatever they desire.
Finally, a collective conscience would be created.
This is too idealistic to be real...
I wanna leave this place... please, let me dream again...
It’s a beautiful poem.
ReplyDeletebeautiful writing, the subject is touching, I like your poem.
ReplyDeleteIt is a beautiful poem, very well written, you speak of many true things: egoism, war, invidualism.
ReplyDeleteYour poem makes us dream of a world of sharing and altruism, without selfishness or invidualism.
Thanks
It is an excellent poem, you succeded in making me dream, good job!
ReplyDeleteYour sentences have a lot of sense and the seconde stanza is my favorite
Very nice poem you're an artist
ReplyDeleteA beautiful poem is a touching subject. You talk about today's topics: a society where egoism and individualism is present. Your poeme makes us dream of a better world, a world where citizens respect each other without war and without fear.
ReplyDeleteYour poem is very, very powerful. You used a lot of vocabulary about dystopia and utopia, and you made us dream of a better world, fearless and peaceful. As you said, it is such a lovely thought, but we all hope this dream will come true.
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
what an emotional poem! I will let you dreaming again.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is very beautiful and it represents the idea of utopia and still makes us want to dream
ReplyDeleteI like your poem! It is has another time very touching and very realistic especially when you say that the children shall never live the war while today still they know her.
ReplyDeleteI like this poem because is very touching and it shows a real sensitivity. The most touching image is that stated in the last sentence « I wanna leave this place ». I’ m impress by this poem because he respect the syllables and use rhymes. congratulations of her !
ReplyDeleteYou're writing is very great you make me dream and fly where i'd like all what you said is true and touching me
ReplyDeletegood job,you can be proud of you the topic is beautiful and all sentences too! congratulations
ReplyDeleteYour poem is well and very inspiring. I like the way you approach the differents visions of dystopia. Also the idea of dream,I particulary liked the last sentence who shows the desire of escape of the poet
ReplyDeleteGood job
Your poem is great, I like the notion of dream. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThis is such an amazing poem, you should become a poet seriously , I really like when you talk about the children , very good job !
ReplyDeletePlease let me read again your poem! It’s really nice, if i don’t know it was you, I probably think it a professional poet
ReplyDeleteIt's a really beautiful poem. He gives us a lot of things and he shows us the reality of things.
ReplyDeleteThe sentences are very well shot and we understand what the author wants to convey.
it's a very good job.
I really like the images you used for each stanza : children, egoism... it's really real. I like the repetition at the end of each stanza because when we read "Let me dream again" we are dreaming on the moment. Very good job.
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it's a beautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteI love your poems, he is very emotional.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is very touching, the vision you have of an ideal world is really beautiful ! I also want to live in this place. An altruistic world, without individualism and without fear is an ideal that I want for our society. We must continue to try to change mentalities to hope, one day, live in this perspective.
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